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May. 25th, 2010 07:37 pmFrom chapter 1 of Fuzzy Logic:
"Ah. She had forgotten the less enjoyable reality of possession. … it meant you had to be a human. Bipedal. With a grimace the kyuubi stood on two legs, shakily finding her balance and looking down at her clothes. Blech. Another annoying human necessity. … She pulled all the constricting fabric off and set about examining her body. … there was this dangly thing that seemed completely impractical, and she felt it had some sort of significance…
Oh hells no! She wasn't going to get stuck in a male body again. Again? Well, ever. … Well, this simply wouldn't do. Fortunately, it seemed pretty easy to shift the bits around as she saw fit. For some reason her chakra flowed familiarly along the body, molding it to be that of a human female. It almost felt like she was healing a hole ripped in her chest, though the male condition wasn't painful or an injury, per se, the switch had the same degree of satisfaction.
The kitsune looked down at her chest. She now had two impractical dangling things."
Which was when I decided that it would take a hell of a lot of poor grammar, bad plot, and horrible characterization to make me not like the story.
"Ah. She had forgotten the less enjoyable reality of possession. … it meant you had to be a human. Bipedal. With a grimace the kyuubi stood on two legs, shakily finding her balance and looking down at her clothes. Blech. Another annoying human necessity. … She pulled all the constricting fabric off and set about examining her body. … there was this dangly thing that seemed completely impractical, and she felt it had some sort of significance…
Oh hells no! She wasn't going to get stuck in a male body again. Again? Well, ever. … Well, this simply wouldn't do. Fortunately, it seemed pretty easy to shift the bits around as she saw fit. For some reason her chakra flowed familiarly along the body, molding it to be that of a human female. It almost felt like she was healing a hole ripped in her chest, though the male condition wasn't painful or an injury, per se, the switch had the same degree of satisfaction.
The kitsune looked down at her chest. She now had two impractical dangling things."
Which was when I decided that it would take a hell of a lot of poor grammar, bad plot, and horrible characterization to make me not like the story.